一位逝者的恩泽(组诗)

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你对我说过,下雨的时候很美,很美,起初我不明白,后来我明白了,雨下的真的很美,很美;忙,不忙哪能行呢?上学的孩子还等着你的回答呢?那一天下着雨,大伙都去追长时间干活欠下的瞌睡,而你却望着帐篷的窗口,看看整整一个上午,直到中午吃饭的时候,我去叫你的时候,然而你却给我说了一句,雨真的很美,很美。
                                                                                                                                                                    ————题记
                                                                                  1.在工地上

                                                                    火辣辣的工地上
                                                                    我们各自扛着钢管
                                                                    磨破了肩膀
                                                                    我从不说痛
                                                                    回到帐篷
                                                                    有你擦洗止痛的秘方

                                                                    你那露者脚趾的鞋布
                                                                    沾满了
                                                                    水泥,砂浆
                                                                    你推起斗车
                                                                    那转过身的脊背
                                                                    凸出了新的一轮脊梁
                              
                                                                           2.你却说下雨很美

                                                         白天多余的雨
                                                         我很怕
                                                         我清除的知道
                                                         你也一样
                                                         很怕
                                                         手里的活都干不成

                                                         可是那天
                                                         你却说着
                                                         下雨很美
                                                          很美
        
                                                       3.太阳怎么也中毒呢

                                                          下午的三点钟
                                                          太阳怎么也中毒呢
                                                          钢管也跟着发疯了呢
                                                          八十米的高度
                                                          钢管
                                                          你怎么
                                                          不往上跳呢
                                                           跳下面干什么呢
                                                           此时
                                                           偏砸中了你的脑门
                                                      
                                                           顿时
                                                           我们之间的天空
                                                           乌云滚滚
                                                           雷声隆隆
                                                           倾盆大雨


                                                                4.雨真的很美

                                                                 你离开的时候
                                                                 看我的眼神
                                                                 让我明白了
                                                                 你说的是对的
                                                                 雨真的很美
                                                                 很美




             ————     后记                                                      
                                                离这件事已经好几年了,我还一直在工地上面干着活,身边虽然多了很多朋友,但是你不一样,你让我明白了,“你是一个伟大的父亲,你加班加点的,从不放过任何休息的时间,为了给上学孩子凑够学费,直到你燃烧到了尽头,却说着,雨真的很美,很美”

文章评论

西米

很真挚动人,顶![em]e179[/em]

笑迎春归

再次看了这首感人的诗 虽然有些叙事的味道 但每次看都会热泪盈眶 每次看心里都会有种震撼 雨是有情的 正因为她的忙碌 才会给累的人休息的空间 但她不知道 现实社会在她的晶莹里渗透了生活的沉重 雨是有先知的 突然与太阳的交锋 预示着人间风雨即来的不幸 但她不知道 美好在她的哭泣里离去那么匆匆 雨是美丽的 仔细聆听淅沥着的自然旋律 能听得到她正在阴郁中播种鲜活的希望 她一定知道的 yu huo fenghuang重生要经历的隐痛

〃此人已死〃

你把生活与现实赤裸裸的写出来了!!! 因为真实的故事往往都那么感人!! 所以这首诗的确很好!!! 雨是美的!!!工人更美!!!

-西布

“雨真的很美…” 当世间风景繁华散尽、纷落成一地苍凉,远天父亲的身体,眺望成高山峻岭的巍峨,…很沧桑…偶而…一处闲愁,两点雨声……

丶Queena

很有文采,期待你的文章喔~加油哈<

紫萝兰

很伤感,我一直都不喜欢伤感的旋律,然而我却因它而感动,朋友说:我总是多愁善感的。其实不是的,只有真切的我才能释放我的情绪的…其实他多么渴望能在雨天与家人团聚的…希望他在天堂过的好…

Cherish.He

伤感,更多的是感动…那雨,真的很美…