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• 牛津才子2013-03-25 21:24:54[举报]

sign是死前的生命体征 uncork太直白的译文与生命几乎无关 不连贯的people选词 这里尽早带出you来 展开叙述 这个you泛指人们
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博主回复： 2013-03-25 20:15:47
译艺不止，止之于半山前。
若得见才子亮剑，甚好。
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我不必亮剑于你，我的一学生卡着表用了九分钟就搞定这！

生活像一杯红酒，热爱生活的人会从中品出无穷的美妙。将它握在手中观察，它的暗红有血的感觉，那正是生命的痕迹。抿一口留在口中回味，它的甘甜有一丝苦涩，如人生一般复杂迷离。喝一口下肚，余香沁人心脾，让人终身受益。红酒越陈越美味，生活越丰富越美好。当人生走向晚年，就如一瓶待开封的好酒，其色彩是沉静的，味道中充满慷慨与智慧。

【牛津才子一学生版】Life is like a glass of red wine, and it tastes divine when you love it. Just hold it in your hand and observe it, you’ll feel the blood when you see its dark-red color, which exactly is the passing life. Then take a little sip of it, thoughtfully sipping it in your mouth--it’s too sweet to hide bits of its bitterness--just like the labyrinthine life. And gulp down a mouthful of it and you’ll feel a lingering sweet smell of it that makes you feel a gratifying sense and reap a lifelong benefit. The older the wine aged in the bottle is, the more luscious it will be. And so is your life, the fuller you enjoy it to, the more wonderful it will be. In your declining years, you’ll feel life is like a bottle of wine to be opened up with its peace and serenity in form, and generosity and wisdom in it.

【青出于蓝而胜于蓝啊，老朽不行了！牛津才子建议一处to be opened up换成unfolded指的是生命的绽放，直接说be uncorked就只是开瓶子喝酒了，与描写的生命脱节许多，太直白的文字译文。】

【飞渡版】这样文字，要求半个小时内译完，真的好难！

 Life is like a glass of red wine. People who have a passion for it would find that it has a wonderful taste that lingers. Hold it in your hand and observe it, you then have a sense that its color dark red suggests blood, which is just a sign of life.

Take a sip and savor it (in your mouth), you will find it is slightly bitter in its sweetness, a taste exactly the same as life so complicated and mysterious. Then swallow it up and you will feel its lingering flavor refreshes your mind, bringing you lifelong benefits.

The longer red wine ages, the better it tastes. Similarly, the more you experience in life; the more wonders it reveals for you. Life at old age is just like a bottle of good wine, ready to be uncorked(opened), with its color serene and peaceful and its taste imbued with

 (full of) generosity and wisdom.

【网上版】
Life is like a cup of wine; people who love it discover inexhaustible wonders from it. Hold in the hand and gaze at it, the dark red color is reminiscent of the blood, which is the impress of life. Take a sip of it and appreciate the taste, the bittersweet flavor is exactly the same with life, which is complicated and blurred. Once the sip is swallowed, the lingering fragrance pleases the heart and refreshes the mind, leaving a person lifelong benefit. There is a remarkable resemblance between life and wine: the taste becomes more delicious as the wine mellows, just as life gets better as it becomes more abundant. When life comes to twilight years, it looks calm and tastes full of wisdom and generosity, just like a bottle of wine to be savored.

【自娱自乐版】

生活像一杯红酒，热爱生活的人会从中品出无穷的美妙。将它握在手中观察，它的暗红有血的感觉，那正是生命的痕迹。抿一口留在口中回味，它的甘甜有一丝苦涩，如人生一般复杂迷离。喝一口下肚，余香沁人心脾，让人终身受益。红酒越陈越美味，生活越丰富越美好。当人生走向晚年，就如一瓶待开封的好酒，其色彩是沉静的，味道中充满慷慨与智慧。

Life is like a glass of red wine, andthe life-loving People enjoy its wonderfultaste that lingers. Holding itin your hand, you observeit with asense that its dark red colourresembles blood, which is none other than asign of life.
To take a sip and savor it， youcan tell there’s some bitternessin its sweetness, a taste exactly the same as life so complicated andmysterious. After gulpingit down,you will feel its lingering flavor revigorates you, surely it brings you lifelongbenefits.
The longer the red wine ages, thebetter it tastes.Likewise, themore you experience your life;the more your lifeamazes you.Life at old age is just like a bottle of good wine, ready to be uncorked, with its color soserene and peaceful and its taste is imbued with generosity and wisdom.